Dull 俳句

moonlit hearts crave edge
unsharpened heartbeats carve tears
scattered whispers grieve

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2 thoughts on “Dull 俳句

  1. This is beautiful too. May I be allowed to make an observation? I notice you stick strictly to the convention of 5-7-5 syllables, but as it so happens, I was the editor-in-chief of a Canadian haiku journal, Canadian Zen Haiku canadien, for several years, and I published haiku from haijin from all around the world, one of whom was (and is) Gabi Greve of Japan. It was she who taught me that there are not syllables in Japanese haiku, and so the so-called 5-7-5 convention is artificial. This is why you will see that my own haiku almost never adhere to this principle. What is more, if you write a haiku in one language, in my case, English, and try to translate it into another, it just does not work. And the syllable count, if we wish to call it that, is almost always different in different languages. Add to this the fact that I also often write haiku in 3 languages, Mycenaean Linear B Greek and ancient Greek = 1, English =2 & French =3, and the matter gets much more complicated. I think you will find that if you do a Google search on the so-called convention of 5-7-5 in haiku, the most experienced and most established of haiku poets (haijin) do not adhere to the 5-7-5 principle. If you are willing to contact me, you can do so at: vallance22@zoho.com and I can give you some of these key links. Forgive me if I have overstepped the bounds of propriety, because indeed your haiku are beautiful. Thank you for your kind understanding. Richard


    1. Thank you for such an amazing comment! I am still barely scratching the surface of any poetry I compose, especially haiku! I did not know that 5-7-5 was artificial! I recall in school, that 5-7-5 defined Haiku! I am going to do a bit more research on this and as a resolution for the New Year, to experiment more with Haiku! I will contact you! Thank you again!


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